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Onto another rusty dawn
The sun bleeds now forth.
A bright blot.
Not warm;
Cold.
Lone.
Stark.
Rising;
Ascendant.
Daring to shed light,
Onto another rusty dawn.

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Mason
Mason
1 year ago

I see a lot of rusty dawn’s, and go into them.

clluelo
clluelo
1 year ago

That was my morning !

Joni Smith
Joni Smith
1 year ago

Red Dawn’s remind me of West Texas and looking out over a flat red dirt plot of land prior to planting season.

GsGirl
GsGirl
1 year ago

And it goes on, and on, and on, and on…when does it end?
Grateful to you, Sir!!!
Sweet Kisses…like in an emoji…from a friend.💋💋💋
We are all your friend!🐕

Miche
Miche
1 year ago

I’ve been reading a new translation of The Odyssey (into modern American English, which is fun, haha) and it keeps using the phrase “rosy fingered dawn.” Which, on further reflection, seems a rather quiet and cozy way to greet the adventures of a new day. This rusty dawn sounds gritty and dispassionate in comparison. Like it’s time to start the day kicking butt and taking names, whether you wanted to snuggle longer under the covers or not.

Miche
Miche
1 year ago
Reply to  Theo Dyssean

I keep trying to picture that in my head… like, a dark red wine 🍷 sea? Does wine come in a color that matches the sea?? But wine is often a gift poured out to the gods, a sign of respect and honor, so I imagine they are related somehow, even if I don’t get it yet.

rynosbucket
rynosbucket
1 year ago

Sometimes I wonder if it is me that is Rusty, and the dawn is just kicking that in my face…

Mic-Mac
Mic-Mac
1 year ago

I hope that the rusty dawn eventually turns to another color tone, and it does not continue as rusty forever.

Susan B
Susan B
1 year ago

Like a dagger waiting to strike the heart! Not looking forward to this dawning, It will demand a heavy payment. Your poem’s like a shaft of cold iron, TO. I think you hit your mark.

Susan B
Susan B
1 year ago

By the way, TO. Who’s writing the news Haiku’s? You?

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